Thursday, February 6, 2014

Script rewrite

Below is the part of the scene where I included some additional story dialogue. The added text is highlighted in bold.

TOM (CONTD)
She can't leave me.
GERALDINE
Ah now stop that, she'll be fine.
TOM
Not this time. I think I'm losing her. She's all I've got.
PAUSE.

GERALDINE
Do you remember when you first found out she was ill?
               TOM
That was a long time ago now Geraldine.
GERALDINE
You told me you felt so helpless.
TOM
          God I hated feeling like that.
GERALDINE
And all you could think of was the first time you ever saw her cry. She fell and started crying. You just held her and stroked her hair. Then she stopped. All was calm.
TOM
It was all I could think to do. Not much really.
GERALDINE
But you were there for her Tom. Just like you’re there for her now. You’ve always been there. And she knows it.
TOM
But she’s so sick now… I don’t think that’ll be enough.
GERALDINE
You have to believe it will. And I'll be here for you.
TOM
Yeah... Like you were before?
GERALDINE
I'm here now aren't I?
Tom doesn't look at Geraldine. Geraldine tries to grab his attention.
GERALDINE (CONTD)
Just because I left doesn't mean you can give up. You've got to be strong for her and for yourself.
Tom sits silenced. He looks at his watch.
TOM
I should be getting back.
He stands and begins to walk away before turning back to Geraldine.
TOM (CONTD)
You'll be back won't ya?
GERALDINE
If you need me to...
Tom walks away.





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